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Sword of Cerberus
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Preferred Name: Glaz
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Post by UrielIscariot on Jan 21, 2016 3:21:54 GMT -5
I think he's finally ready for eval. Profile's all edited and finalized and hopefully I didn't forget anything!  Uriel's Profile - [ LINK ]RPs - [ LINK1 ] [ LINK2 ] [ LINK3 ] [ LINK4 ]Thank you!!  Edit: Forgot to mention this as a small comparison reference, the deadlift record is currently 1020 lbs. and 1150 lbs. for different competitions. |
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Post by Kendra on Jan 21, 2016 19:43:06 GMT -5
UrielIscariot Hey Glaz, I'll be taking care of you this round \o/ Before we begin, could you make sure the skeleton and coded profile match? At the moment they're quite different so I'm not able to look over them properly. Once that's done, we can get started. Thank you ! |
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Post by UrielIscariot on Jan 21, 2016 19:53:34 GMT -5
Alrighty! The tech and body-mods are now directly copied over so that should take care of everything on that front.  |
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Post by Kendra on Jan 28, 2016 21:46:32 GMT -5
UrielIscariot So for your eval, I'll break things up into parts to make it easier - since you also said something about that aha. We'll start w/ the physical and base info first, if that's okay ! We do look at everything as a whole so while one thing might seem like an odd detail it's for a reason, but this should hopefully speed up the process ;v; - To start, I'd prefer if you lower Uriel's weight ! It's a strange request, I know, but 512lbs is crazy high - even with his height and muscular structure. He could easily kill someone just by sitting on them aha. I'd like to see it between 350 and 375lbs. The Mountain ( from Game of Thrones ), is around this weight and the closest point of reference I could find in terms of height, strength, general structure, etc \o/
- What type of lift are you talking about when you mention how much Uriel can lift? There's quite a big difference between an overhead lift, squats, bench press, deadlift, etc - so I'd love to know which one you mean!
- For the trauma response, please bring it down to a max of 3x the normal healing rate! 8x is crazy high, and a wound that would take 3 months to heal would naturally do so in 12 days for him. ;v; Don't forget that a hospital can also help the healing process for wounds, so he wouldn't be out of commission for too long.
- Your heart and bones are good to go!
- Background is also good to go \o/
I noticed that the coded profile and the actual skeleton don't match in some places, such as the lifting weight, his hand guns ( which could be considered unique tech! ), so if you could put those in I'd appreciate it a lot. ;v; |
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Sword of Cerberus
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Post by UrielIscariot on Jan 31, 2016 6:39:08 GMT -5
KendraHey there! Thanks for this!  - I looked up the actor for The Mountain and he actually is a great physical parallel for Uriel! Both of them are 6'9" with similar musculature. Sources can't seem to agree on his weight though, ranging from 386-419 lbs. With the body modifications in mind, what do you think of just knocking 100 off of Uriel and landing him on 412 lbs?
- The lift type in mind was deadlift, basically Uriel's ability to get down and pick up an object off the ground for a short period of time. A practical application of this being Uriel's ability to lift a beam or given object off of a trapped person.
- Trauma response reduced to 1/3 normal time and details adjusted to reflect that!
- Glad to hear the heart, bones, and BG are good to go!
- And lastly, the profile and its skeleton as been edited to include the handguns as unique tech as well as the weight strength! Everything should match up now, but lemme know if you spot anything else!
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Post by Kendra on Mar 28, 2016 22:43:46 GMT -5
UrielIscariotHeyooo! So sorry on the wait glaz !! - For the weight, I'd much prefer that you use the range I provided ;v; It's a smaller detail, but keeping it at the higher end of the range (so 375) would be fine!
- Lift sounds good! Thank you for confirming.
With those, moving onto the tech section ! - I'm going to have to say no to the Adrenal Gland Stimulator. This acts as physical magic without the risk of addiction, and seeing as he already has a physical magic set, he wouldn't need it!
- For the Physical Magix set 2, that would actually be Earth and not Physical. The acid and fire protection sounds good, but I'm not so sure on the electricity protection. Seeing as metal is a conductor for electricity, it would actually end up being more of a weakness than not - unless he's wearing a rubber suit or something to stop the electricity from running through his body. Also, from your RPs it sounded like Uriel was making an entire suit of armor to cover his body. Sections covered at once works, but all of it at once would be too much of a strain.
- ASR: Just a couple things ! The heat signatures wouldn't be able to see through walls or other solid objects to outline targets.
- For the NUIP scan i'd like specifics for distance and such! A 30 meter radius around Uriel, but he cannot tell where an NUIP is located or who has one would be fantastic.
- He couldn't use all of the features at once and would need to cycle through them.
- The 3D floorplans and other information would need to be obtained beforehand. Other than that, it's all good. - Secret Police Kinetic Shield:
- For the reflection, do you mean bullets and the like? I'd like to see it so projectiles can't get in or out the shield, but people could come in if close enough, and that once set it can't move until drained and ready for recharge. Being able to stop a building from collapsing is a bit much, so I'd also like for that to be removed ;v; - Motion Sensor:
How sensitive is the motion sensor? I'd imagine he can't pick something up that's 20ft away seeing as that would be intensive overload. Also, is there something preventing him from having it on all the time? I'd like to see either some sort of con to him using this or a blind spot that it has.
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