Secret Police
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Posts: 66
Preferred Name: Tyché
Character Profile: LYANTE
Character Name: Lyante Nephila
Status: Lurking
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Post by Tyché on Aug 3, 2015 13:08:59 GMT -5
Eval time for Lyante! Profile: xRP's: x and xLet me know what I have to change or add ~ (I'm guessing it's gonna be a lot) Thanks~ |
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Preferred Name: Lills
Pronouns: She/her
Character Name: Rachael
Main Account: Rachael
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Post by Rachael on Aug 4, 2015 19:40:37 GMT -5
TychéHi Tyché! Before I get to your eval, could I ask you to post a profile skeleton in the first post of Lyante's profile? Thank you!
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Secret Police
proper breast etiquette
Posts: 66
Preferred Name: Tyché
Character Profile: LYANTE
Character Name: Lyante Nephila
Status: Lurking
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Post by Tyché on Aug 5, 2015 4:15:59 GMT -5
RachaelA profile skeleton would be handy! I added a profile skeleton in the first post (under the spoiler), hope it's to your liking ~ EDIT: the profile skeleton will be the most complete one i think (incorporates the limitations of tech and splicing)
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Character Name: Rachael
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Post by Rachael on Aug 5, 2015 20:06:01 GMT -5
Tychéwow that rp with heather was such an enleyetening read  Okay but moving onto actual eval. You're mostly good to go, just two notes! - Clarifying that Lyante can't use one filter from her goggles and a different one from her eye at the same time, right?
- So with how Novus works, if Lyante's parents were both upper class and were killed, Lyante would actually be given to another Upper Class family. The only case where she would move downwards would be if she had close family ( nothing more distant than siblings/grandparents/uncles/cousins ) in a lower class. So if you would like her to have started off in the slums, she would have needed to be born there or have some close family that she would have been handed off to. Otherwise, she would have been still raised in the Upper Class.
Clarify/fix those two things and you'll be ready to go!
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Secret Police
proper breast etiquette
Posts: 66
Preferred Name: Tyché
Character Profile: LYANTE
Character Name: Lyante Nephila
Status: Lurking
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Post by Tyché on Aug 6, 2015 5:45:15 GMT -5
RachaelI know, reyeght? --- - I included a note that she can't use two different modes in the eye and goggle if she combines them. No mixing modes. Doing so will result in seeing nothing and a major headache.
- Lyante now takes a slight detour: after the death of her parents, she is placed in the care of her uncle in the slums. After six years, he dies of an overdose on faulty magic code (ah, black market: you get what you pay for). Then, having run out of family and living in the slums, she is placed in the state orphanage in the slums.
I hope this solves all remaining things? Lemme know if I messed it up! Thanks for the feedback ~
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Character Name: Rachael
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Post by Rachael on Aug 6, 2015 17:18:31 GMT -5
TychéFilter mode looks good o7 On the backstory though, sorry, I should have been clearer. There are no orphanages at all in Novus. In the event of her uncle's death in the slums, she would have been given to another slums family or just essentially left to fend for herself in the case that no one would take her. There is no state orphanage system or anything like that.
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Secret Police
proper breast etiquette
Posts: 66
Preferred Name: Tyché
Character Profile: LYANTE
Character Name: Lyante Nephila
Status: Lurking
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Post by Tyché on Aug 6, 2015 17:44:25 GMT -5
RachaelAhhh, sorry for misinterpreting that  I removed all references to an orphanage, she now wanders around after her uncle dies, staying with various families for short times before moving on until she's 16 and old enough to take the test. Thanks again for the feedback, sorry for the mix up, lemme know if there's anything else ~
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hufflefucker with pride
Posts: 4
Preferred Name: Lills
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Character Name: Rachael
Main Account: Rachael
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Post by Rachael on Aug 6, 2015 17:59:57 GMT -5
Tychéalright, that all looks good! Congrats on first teal name /o/
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