Unapproved Character
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Posts: 13
Preferred Name: Lube
Character Profile: [ x ]
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Post by lain on Aug 5, 2015 23:01:25 GMT -5
i have no idea what i am doing so there's probably like 8457385738958935938 things i need to change IM SCARED
+ profleilefiefle
+ one rp
+ two rps
i am positive i'm pretty fuzzy on some stuff so o|-< if there is anything that needs clarifying please let me know
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Administrator
hufflefucker with pride
Posts: 4
Preferred Name: Lills
Pronouns: She/her
Character Name: Rachael
Main Account: Rachael
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Post by Rachael on Aug 9, 2015 16:00:59 GMT -5
lainheyo lube! Your rps look good, but a few things on the profile need clarification. Gene Mods - So having the carbon fiber bones go to her midthigh would be half a bone, which doesn't necessarily make sense. You're also learning on the border of going over 50%, so if you could change that to knees and below, or some other combination of bones, that would be awesome!
- The time for surviving w/out food and water is fine, but just want to make sure its clear that just because she can survive that long doesn't mean she wouldn't get incredibly weak and experience extreme pain as time stretched on.
Tech - So the syringes themselves are fine, but I'm curious how the storage works. Her arms are natural, right? She couldn't exactly have compartments in her arms because she'd need all the flesh and vessels/arteries in there and such. The compartments could work if the arms were prosthetic, but otherwise I think you'll need a different way to store them.
Also please note that her store will be approved separately when we get to it in the administration section and is not a part of this eval.
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